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A good article is...
Well-written:
Prose
- "is considered one of the signature pieces of the 20th century" – signature pieces of what? Presumably Western classical music, but I'd be precise here.
- The wording comes from the source below:
- Adalian, Rouben Paul (2010). Historical Dictionary of Armenia. Lanham, Maryland: Scarecrow Press. p. 381. ISBN 978-0-8108-7450-3.
As for the Sabre Dance from Gayane, it has entered the realm of popular music as one of the 20th century's signature pieces.
- Should I make it "one of the signature pieces of the 20th century popular music"?
- I think that would make sense
 Done
- "two-and-a-half" should not be hyphenated as it is not a compound adjective
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- "use on ... popular culture" doesn't really work, suggest changing to "use on screen and in popular culture"
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- "final Act IV": it's surely either the final act, or Act IV?
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- Is "Hapiness" an intentional mispelling?
- Fixed No, just a typo.
- "With a libretto", I think
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- "her husband Giko", suggest a comma after Giko
- Do you mean before?
- Yes, sorry about that
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- "the 'manly and heroic' essence of Armenian male folk dances, and 'the fiery temperament, raw energy'": I think this ought to be "the fiery temperament [and] raw energy". Also, the comma after dances could be easily cut.
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- I think a comma is needed after "specialized woodwind instruments"
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- "he jokingly responded:": I think comma instead of colon here
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- "on the U.S. best-selling sheet music charts"
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- "various recordings spent 23 weeks on the top 40 of the Cash Box Disc-Hits Box Score, peaking at No. 1 in May 1948."
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- "in November 1968, that propelled them to fame": spurious comma
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- Comma needed after "In Tengiz Abuladze's Repentance (1987)"
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- "The piece has also been used in women-only sports synchronized swimming and rhythmic gymnastics." Does this mean women's-only swimming and gymnastics, or women's only sports, synchronized swimming, and gymnastics?
- As in both sports are contested exclusively by women. Not super important, but wanted to stress that because the listed figure skaters (chosen solely by prominence) are mostly men.
- In that case, I would suggest phrasing as "The piece has also been used in women's-only synchronized swimming and rhythmic gymnastics."
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- Comma after "Sochi, Russia"
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MOS
- Generally compliant
- Slight quibble: I feel like some of them smaller sections could easily be merged into larger sections with subsections. I've mocked up what this might look like below; feel free to use or disregard as this is not a GA criterion, although it is tangential to MOS:OVERSECTION.
- Background
- Composition
- Reception and legacy (combining Popularity and legacy, and Critial reception)
- Recordings, arrangements, and covers
- Usage in popular culture
- Done No, I do agree. ----Երևանցի talk 09:41, 19 November 2025 (UTC)
Verifiable with no original research:
- Acceptable reference presentation for GA
- Not GA, but would recommend bundling with {{multiref}} instead
- Looks much neater. Done!
- "global musical shorthand for cartoonish urgency" needs a WP:LEADCITE
- added
- What makes refs 20, 68, 91, 131, 132, 146, 207, and 209 reliable sources? (refs per this version - note by Yerevantsi)
- 20 = faculty.weber.edu removed.
- 68 = Discogs removed.
- 91 = This one's tricky. Discogs is the only source I could find on Liberace's 1951 recording since he was still a minor figure then and the album wasn't big. I'll check again to replace it with a better ref. UPD: I've removed the Discogs ref and reworded the Liberace bit.
- 131 & 132 = cashboxarchives.com is the authorized early archives of the magazine as directly linked in their website.
- 146 = SecondHandSongs removed.
- 207 = goldenskate.com is a reputable figure skating resource, but I've found a better source (an autobiography). I've kept goldenskate for now.
- 209 = icenetwork.com was ran (before being shut down in 2018) by U.S. Figure Skating, the national governing body.
- Happy with changes
Broad in its coverage:
- Do we know anything more about the premiere or publishing of sheet music?
- I could not find any more details on the premiere. I've have added a few sentences on sheet music here.
- Generally stays on topic (as a musician, I'd love to see more weighting given to discussion to the music itself, but I don't view this as a barrier to broadness as I would with comprehensiveness)
- Could you advise on how discussion of the music could be expanded or improved?
- I thought I found more analysis, but it seems I was mistaken. It might be nice to have the full orchestration (maybe taken from a source like this DMA thesis), but that isn't essential at this stage.
Neutral:
- I think generally more opinions need to be attributed in text. We have things like "one of the most famous pieces of music", but without knowing who said these it has quite a laudatory air. Including attribution would help to prevent this.
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- "'Sabre Dance' has featured in countless feature films": countless seems both over-enthusiastic and incorrect. I'm sure someone could tally up the appearances if given time. I suggest replacing with many.
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Stable:
- Content is not subject to an edit war, and has been stable barring gradual improvements in preparation for review
Illustrated:
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Last comments:
- "It is also used in sports, notably as a theme song": MOS:EDITORIAL
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- Missing full stop after "Ukrainian Gopak (Hopak)"
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- I'm assuming the "sliding effects" are just glissandos. Suggest a link to glissando or just replacing with the proper term
- yes, Fixed
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- "In 1948, "Sabre Dance" became a jukebox sensation in the United States—dubbed the "Khachaturian Year" by Newsweek.": This construction doesn't really work. I suggest something like the following reshuffle to make sure the last part is modifying the year.:"In 1948—which was dubbed the "Khachaturian Year" by Newsweek—"Sabre Dance" became a jukebox sensation in the United States."
- Done
- "blues/psychedelic guitar/bass/drum instrumental version": rephrase dash constructions per MOS:/
- Done
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